Talvin
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« on: December 07, 2007, 06:23:51 PM » |
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Hey folks! Hope you're all ok. As for me I simply have no time for making music whatsoever, which really Pi***s me off. Maybe at the beginning of next year... Nevertheless I started (another) new song which I "only" have to finish. I'd be happy if you would give me some feedback on it. I hope to be back soon. Have a nice December/Christmas Time, Tal http://www.myspace.com/talvinjones
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« Last Edit: December 09, 2007, 12:20:50 PM by Talvin »
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« Reply #1 on: December 07, 2007, 09:44:44 PM » |
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This sounds good to me so far. I hope you have such a boring time now that you are compelled to carry on with it
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If you have a poem, I have a tune, and we exchange these, we can both have a poem, a tune, and a song. - Will
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kara
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« Reply #2 on: December 08, 2007, 09:13:30 AM » |
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Interesting At the moment I have 2 remarks - I'm not so fun of the comping style of the guitar that comes in at 0:35 ? - The mix will need some work. I realy have to concentrate on what you are singing to understand the lyrics. I've listened with headphones and still don't understand every word.... Hope this helps k
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Talvin
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« Reply #3 on: December 08, 2007, 09:39:12 AM » |
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Thanks for your comments. I'll see what I can do. Kara, do you mean the rhythm guitar that also sets in in the first verse? I think the timing is a bit unprecise, which is not a problem since it's a vst guitar and I can simply change that.
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« Reply #4 on: December 08, 2007, 10:49:16 AM » |
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Yep that's the one I mean k Thanks for your comments. I'll see what I can do. Kara, do you mean the rhythm guitar that also sets in in the first verse? I think the timing is a bit unprecise, which is not a problem since it's a vst guitar and I can simply change that.
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Talvin
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« Reply #5 on: December 08, 2007, 11:21:03 AM » |
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I think it will sound better when the timing is more precise. Or would you change the rhythm?
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« Reply #6 on: December 08, 2007, 01:26:54 PM » |
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I think I would personnaly change the rythm Just my feeling, let see what others think of it k
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Talvin
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« Reply #7 on: December 08, 2007, 04:55:17 PM » |
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Actually I think it's ok (apart from the timing), but maybe some others can post their opinions on that.
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« Reply #8 on: December 08, 2007, 05:29:25 PM » |
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shit, it cut off, I think theres a real style on this, bit of a Nick Hayword slant to it without the brass stabs, but maybe some brass shots will work, good start
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« Reply #9 on: December 08, 2007, 05:51:47 PM » |
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Hi Talvin, The intro is flawless & it really hooked me in,but where the vocal track begins,I think toning down the guitar track with a muted-finger picking rif instead,would be an ideal setting for the vocals & there would be no need to raise the volume of the vocal track. Along with this,I think adding a keyboard track with chord progressions would be a nice way to support the guitar rif I suggested. I think these two elements would really accentuate your existing vocal track. It's really off to a great start though-with that intro & I am looking forward to the finished product. Elwood
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Talvin
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« Reply #10 on: December 08, 2007, 06:45:15 PM » |
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Thank you two for listening. I'll see what Real Strat can do...muted finger picking? Hmm...Are there any songs where I can listen to something like that. I'm not a guitar player...
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« Reply #11 on: December 08, 2007, 07:38:14 PM » |
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Tal,
I like this one..I'll be interested to hear what you decide to do with it.
Wyatt
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« Reply #12 on: December 08, 2007, 11:47:06 PM » |
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Hi Talvin I thought this was a sketch, but I was wrong beacuse this track is already well developed. It's another interesting song and I hope you'll find a way to finish it soon. I won't comment on the mix and sound quality 'cause i'm listening on laptop speakers. About the rhythm gtr matter I think you should try to fix the timing first, and then eventually trying changing the part. If you compare two different parts I think it's easier to figure out what you really want from it (it works for me) Well done so far Cheers
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Talvin
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« Reply #13 on: December 09, 2007, 12:18:30 PM » |
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Thanks. I'll correct the timing issue and will try to finish the song soon. Don't know about a different guitar part as I'm not a guitarist. I'm trying to play/program the guitars as authentical as I can, but if there's something peculiar about them please tell me. http://www.myspace.com/talvinjones
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